Hi Frances, I like the main idea of your story about being kind. If you had to add some details about how the girl stood up for the other girl, what would it be? I'd love to find out more about your characters.
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Hi Frances, I like the main idea of your story about being kind. If you had to add some details about how the girl stood up for the other girl, what would it be? I'd love to find out more about your characters.
ReplyDeletethe other girl said how would you feel if that happened to you.
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